I'm still halfway through reading this very interesting analysis, but I thought I should draw your attention to a couple of typos.

You've written: "and young girls they were going to girl."

Also, just before part 2 (Bruce recruits Barry), you have a weird html tag that's turned a whole bunch of text into a web link.



ETA: Also, you're putting some quotes in italics for emphasis, but your normal journal style has all quoted text in italics, so I can't tell the difference.