This is wonderful. I'm really enjoying the slow reveal, the fluid, reflective yet conversational manner of your prose, and most of all that you've made the shanshu something rife with complications, layers and gray areas.

I liked Will's distraction at the sunset, and his poetic comments on what he felt, what he was seeing. Just lovely.

The quiet tone of this piece is deeply compelling. I'm off to read more. Excellent work. :)