I'm still halfway through reading this very interesting analysis, but I thought I should draw your attention to a couple of typos.
You've written: "and young girls they were going to girl."
Also, just before part 2 (Bruce recruits Barry), you have a weird html tag that's turned a whole bunch of text into a web link.
ETA: Also, you're putting some quotes in italics for emphasis, but your normal journal style has all quoted text in italics, so I can't tell the difference.
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Date: 2021-03-28 09:44 pm (UTC)You've written: "and young girls they were going to girl."
Also, just before part 2 (Bruce recruits Barry), you have a weird html tag that's turned a whole bunch of text into a web link.
ETA: Also, you're putting some quotes in italics for emphasis, but your normal journal style has all quoted text in italics, so I can't tell the difference.