Yup. That's the one sub-plot that does not work for me. It's so cliche. Rich boy is involved with Rich girl, poor boy falls for rich girl, rich girl flirts with him, rich boy and his friends beat him up - drunken dad chases them away and has a heart attack. Sigh.
It's the only portion of the story that feels off writing wise...a bit clunky and unnecessary. I know why it's there - emphasizing the rich man/poor man choices metaphor that is discussed by Emily and Victoria...but I don't think it quite works and is bit too heavy-handed and one-dimensional.
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branchandroot
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Date: 2011-09-30 04:30 pm (UTC)One reservation: the teen love triangle. Meh.
Yup. That's the one sub-plot that does not work for me. It's so cliche. Rich boy is involved with Rich girl, poor boy falls for rich girl, rich girl flirts with him, rich boy and his friends beat him up - drunken dad chases them away and has a heart attack. Sigh.
It's the only portion of the story that feels off writing wise...a bit clunky and unnecessary.
I know why it's there - emphasizing the rich man/poor man choices metaphor that is discussed by Emily and Victoria...but I don't think it quite works and is bit too heavy-handed and one-dimensional.